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Postpone the Transfer of the Tsukiji Market
By: Masae Shibasaki, Contributor

New Tokyo Governor Yuriko Koike decided to postpone the transfer of the Tsukiji Wholesale Market to its new location in Toyosu last August 31, 2016. There is evidence that the soil in Toyosu is contaminated. However, if the move will be delayed, the construction of road line No.2 might also be postponed. Both might adversely affect the Tokyo Olympic Games in 2020.

As a result, Ken Hirata, who is an expert in the Consideration Meeting on soil contamination of Toyosu, at a press conference on September 17 said, “There is no problem at all because it falls below the environmental standards of the subsequent investigation,” he explained.

Former governor Ishihara had promoted the relocation of the Tsukiji Market. However, it’s suspicious that there are many opaque trading involving this promotion. Governor Koike pointed it out, and promised to review the relocation plan as a pledge for the last gubernatorial election.

In deciding for the right place where to transfer the market, it’s necessary to consider the strict safety standards of the Tokyo Metropolitan Government. Toyosu already have enough of that standards. But, why is this problem emerging by now? Governor Koike is the first female governor; hence, she has many enemies. At the time of elections, other male candidates and politicians carried out negative campaign strategies against her. “Female is not suitable to be a politician,” according to them.

Discontinuation of the market relocation will affect the Tokyo Olympic Games 2020’s preparation. The success of the Tokyo Olympic Games is one of the achievements that is being expected within her four-year term as governor. The problem in Tsukiji transfer is not a simple matter. A lot of suspicious covert intention and corruption, including gender discrimination issues, are involved. Under this adverse situation, the new governor must accurately exercise her proper judgment and determination.

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Postpone the transfer of the Tsukiji Market
by Masae Shibasaki, Contributor

New Tokyo governor Yuriko Koike decided to postpone the transfer of the Tsukiji Wholesale Market to its new location in Toyosu last 31st Aug. There is evidence that the soil in Toyosu contaminated. However, if the move is delayed the construction of road line No.2 might also be postponed. Both might adversely affect the Tokyo Olympic games in 2020.

As a result, Ken Hirata who is the expert of the consideration meeting of the soil contamination of Toyosu, at a press conference on the 17th sep, “There is no problem at all because it falls below the environmental standards of the subsequent investigation.” he explained.

Former governor Ishihara had promoted the relocation of the Tsukiji market. However, It’s suspicious many opaque trading for involving this promotion. Koike governor pointed out it, and promised to review of the relocation plan as a pledge of the gubernatorial election.

When the select candidate places of market transfers, it’s necessary to got the strict safety standards of the Tokyo Metropolitan Government. Toyosu had already enough that standards. Why this problem has emerged now? Koike governor is the first female governor. Hence, she has many enemy. At the time of elections, other male candidates and politicians carried out negative campaigning to her. “Female is not suitable to politician.”

Discontinuation of the market relocation is interfere in Tokyo Olympic Games 2020’s preparation. The success of the Tokyo Olympic Games, is one of the things that are sought in her four-year term of the governor. The problem in Tsukiji transfer is not a simple matter. A variety of suspicious and corruption, and includes up to gender discrimination issues. The new governor is required accurately situation judgment and determination.

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Postpone the transfer of the Tsukiji Market
by Masae Shibasaki, Contributor

New Tokyo governor Yuriko Koike decided to postpone the transfer of the Tsukiji Wholesale Market to its new location in Toyosu last 31st Aug. There is evidence that the soil in Toyosu is poluted. However, if the move is delayed the construction of road line No.2 might also be postponed. Both might adversely affect the Tokyo Olympic games in 2020.

It was reported largely in the newspapers and TV news, the soil contamination of Toyosu, as a result of the subsequent investigation, experts that there is no problem in less than or equal to the reference value has been announced. Ken Hirata who is the expert meeting, at a press conference on the 17th sep, “There is no problem at all because it falls below the environmental standards. Accumulated water is considered to be or not it be great influence of groundwater” he explained.

For relocation of the Tsukiji market, Ishihara former governor has aging problem, it had promoted the transfer.
“Severity surrounding the Tsukiji market, I think that never allowed the politics of indecision. Tsukiji market, even at a fraction of the seismic intensity of the earthquake, and we are aging to a part of the roof to fall, and, to also compliment, I think that it not be said to be clean. If you look at the new market of Paris, for that it takes such important goods to auction is numbered, they become visible through the glass, like a doing now of Tsukiji, the outside air exposed to, bring, rolled to the ground, like a put price to see it, we are not doing such a primitive thing. Including such a thing, I, a new market, a new feature, safely clean, I think that it should be operated.”
http://www.metro.tokyo.jp/GOVERNOR/ARC/20121031/KAIKEN/TEXT/2010/101022.htm

However, when the promotion of this large business, is that there are many opaque trading for involving a variety of interests.Koike governor, as a pledge of the gubernatorial election, pointed out that, was flying a review of the relocation plan.

The first place, to again to select a candidate site of market transfers, it is necessary to meet the strict safety standards of the Tokyo Metropolitan Government, safety at the time of Toyosu has been selected is cleared. Why at this time, the question whether there remains such a problem has emerged. Koike governor is the first female governor. So she has many enemy. At the time of elections, it is carried out negative campaigning.

Discontinuation of the market relocation, interfere in Tokyo Olympics preparation of. That the success of the Tokyo Olympic Games, is one of the things that are sought in her four-year term of the governor. The problem in Tsukiji transfer is not a simple matter. A variety of interests and corruption, and includes up to gender discrimination issues. The new governor accurately situation judgment and determination is required.

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This is an assessment the course of “English for Journarism” by University of Pennsylvania.

Peer Graded Assignment: Assessment 2:
Detailed instructions:
Write an article (350 word maximum) and include the following parts of an article:
1. headline
2. byline
3. lead
4. body
5. conclusion

Be sure to include your headline and byline in the actual article submission, and not just as the title of your submission.

Remember to include your lead from Assessment 1. Incorporate any important feedback you received from your peers.
Also be sure to include at least one quote and one example of reported speech.

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Peer Graded Assignment: Assessment 2: Write an article based on the lead you created in Assessment 1.
Submit by September 18, 11:59 PM PDT
Important Information
It is especially important to submit this assignment before the deadline, September 18, 11:59 PM PDT, because it must be graded by others. If you submit late, there may not be enough classmates around to review your work. This makes it difficult – and in some cases, impossible – to produce a grade. Submit on time to avoid these risks.
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